Archive for June, 2009

The Story is in the Transitions

Friday, June 12th, 2009

I wrote a comment on Michelle Styles‘s blog a little while ago that, after I thought about it, seemed to beg for a blog piece of its own.

Michelle was talking about writing a partial for her editor and mentioned synyopses and trying to work smarter and understand what works and what doesn’t work. It all makes a lot of sense.

We all want to work smarter. I don’t necessarily love the process of tearing apart the middle of Demetrios’s book and putting it back together again just to say I did. I want it to work, yes, but I would much prefer that it worked the first time!

I thought it did.

And in fact, I think I could make a case that it did. But I think it’s stronger this way. And I didn’t really know it until I got past the middle and had to look back on it. Logically it did work “the old way.”

But the characters are stronger now. And it’s getting to be, I hope, a better book. But as I write, what I’m discovering is that the movement from one point to another is only partially accomplished by what happens in a given scene.

The real keys are the transitions — they are the bridges from one scene to the next, from one point of view to another, from one emotional place to the one that grows out of it.

Getting the right lead-in to a scene is crucial.

Yes, it should come out of the scene before it — even if it’s a contrast or a complete departure and in someone else’s point of view. Still, it has to carry the story to the next place and it has to put the characters and the reader in the right frame of mind when they get there.

Stopping a day’s writing at the end of a scene may seem like a good idea. There’s a sense of closure, a sense of ‘now I can go to sleep because these people are sorted out.’ And that’s fine for the day, but it’s dire for the day after.

There’s no momentum for starting up again. Much better to leave a scene in mid-flight, as it were. Much easier to jump back in and take up where you left off. And then when you finish that scene, at least get going on the next one — even if only with a line or two — so that you have the springboard already there before you quit. It’s lots easier to get going the following day.

Transitions, for me, are the places where I end up reconnoitering about how the characters are feeling, how they perceive the actions they are about to take or that they observe others taking.

Getting off on the right foot with a character’s understanding of things and finding the right tone to express his frame of mind is so important in dealing with the scene. It’s the gut-level place where all scenes have to come from.

If I’m just recounting what happens without being inside the character’s head understanding why it’s happening, the scene is flat, whether it’s a car chase or a a duel or two people talking about what to have for dinner.

The right lead-in and seeing the scene from the point of view of the character — his or her investment in the scene — is what really makes it work. Without that, it’s just me pushing pieces around on a chess board with no inner reason (no why!) in mind. It doesn’t work.

This is probably the long way of saying why I find synopses less than helpful.

They tell me the ‘what’ but I never quite get to the internal ‘why’ until I am actually writing the story. And that only comes when I know the people and how they grow and change.

That change, that growth, is the story. Get it wrong or even simply different and you have a whole different tale.

The Ripple Effect

Thursday, June 11th, 2009


The discussion of revising and, particularly, of ‘middles’ seems to have struck a chord.

Why am I not surprised?

So I thought I would touch on the notion of the ripple effect which anyone who writes surely must be aware of. And if you’re not, you need to be.

Ripples are what happen when you toss a rock in the water, yes? No rock, no ripples resulting. But the minute a rock lands — or you make a change in a manuscript — everything thereafter (and sometimes everything before) has to change as well.

Why?

Because everything is connected. Everything tends to result from something else and lead to something else.

Example: Anne Gracie said to me last week, “I’d rather see Demetrios convince Anny to come with him rather than have her just turn up on the boat.”

Simple, yes. A new scene in which she turns up on the dock, says what she’s come to say, then turns and leaves.

Why? Where’s she going? Why?

And then he goes after her.

Why? (He must be out of his mind).

He convinces her.

Why?

He has his reasons.

Why?

Because of something that happened in his backstory.

Why did it happen?

Because that’s the kind of guy he is, has always been.

And then presuming he succeeds, what then?

She didn’t expect to be on a boat.

Now what?

And of course none of the ‘now what‘ falls into what I’ve already written in chapters 5 and 6. So they have to be completely rewritten with new stuff that follows from the simple change in one scene.

So does the earlier stuff — before the boat scene — because otherwise it wouldn’t have occurred to him to convince her. In fact, he isn’t at all sure this is a good idea.

Sadly, I can’t just simply write down, “Because Anne told me to.”

If ripples aren’t your thing, think about Stephen Covey’s Seven Habits of Highly Effective People. In that book he talks about making small changes.

He says that if you just change a rocket’s trajectory by one degree at lift-off, it will be thousands of miles away from where it would have been if you’d kept the original trajectory. For good or ill, one small change effects everything that comes after.

Yet another way of saying, “One thing leads to another.” There’s just no getting around it — even in books.

So I’m off now to deal with my ripples. I have, however, had a bit of good news to go with it.

My editor is off to France for the week so I have now got until the 22nd to deal with all the ripples and make sense of this thing.

And how are your middles doing today?

Coping with Middles

Wednesday, June 10th, 2009

I have been trying to think of anything an editor has ever said to me about the middle of my books because, to be honest, middles are where, for me, most of the problems occur.

And while I’ve had in the double digits of editors over the past 25 years, I can’t recall one of them saying anything remotely useful about middles other than Ann Leslie’s occasional [delete this?]. The fact is, if I could delete middles altogether, it wouldn’t be a bad thing.

Unfortunately readers seem to expect them in books.

Therefore it is my job to figure them out and put them in.

They are, according to Blake Snyder’s Save The Cat book and beat sheet, the ‘fun and games’ part. This makes them sound like they ought to be fun.

They aren’t.

Or they aren’t fun to write because there is too much to figure out, too many opportunities to either reject or take advantage of, too many options to explore. And in what order???

Do we play volleyball before or after we collect the firewood? Do we explore the mine shaft before or after dinner when the revelation about the hero’s first marriage occurs? And why?

That’s the key: why?

Because that’s what gets you through the middle. Why should we play volleyball now and collect firewood later? Maybe we should just skip the firewood altogether. We could cook spaghetti instead. But then we would be cold and . . . blah, blah, blah. See? Too many options.

Which to choose? And again, why?

And not just the events — events are easy. It’s the emotional connection to each event that’s important. What is it about the firewood or the volleyball or the spaghetti that will trigger the hero’s emotional angst, that will move him to the next step. Why does it?

Why??????

Editors, of course, never have the answers to these things. They say what they hope are Encouraging Words and Meant To Be Sustaining Things like, “You’ll figure it out.”

Of course I will. Eventually. Maybe. I hope.

But it’s not easy. Or it isn’t easy for me. I have to get inside the heads of these blockheads, er, I mean, characters. and figure out what will work for them.

The next person who asks how long it takes me to ‘churn’ out a book is likely to get one thrown at his/her head.

Is there an editor who specializes in middles anywhere out there, someone who can say, “Oh, I see. Of course! You just need to do this because then he’ll see that that has to happen, and then you do that because he’ll need to know she feels thus-and-such, and she will because he will have already told her that blah-blah, and then they’ll get to Greece. Simple!”

Absolutely. So if you know of an editor like that, would you introduce us, please?

Preferably before next Monday.